Erotica
TBR reviewer: B.H.
Review
There is very little in background details, they were skimmed over as if they didn’t matter to the author which left me at a loss. There was so much promise, if only Ms. Milton had fleshed the story out. Chapter one ends abruptly and we’re thrust into the next morning. No details, no flow, nothing that made me invest in the story. There’s nothing on the background of the characters. Does she know Jake without the mask? Or is he just a hot body?
Then there’s the scene with the vibrator standing up against the pillow. As soon as a woman goes down on it, it’ll shift, move, slip and that’s double for when the item is vibrating. How did she manage to keep it upright for her pleasure? Research, research, research or it’s a male writer who was a little clueless to this fact.
On a side note, when a novel or novella is written in first POV it’s a priority to watch the use of ‘I’. The repetition was an annoyance. I noticed that with many words: perfect twice in one sentence, night used twice in another sentence. It stumbled the already uneven flow.
Eventually this gets untangled but the entire beginning hinders an otherwise interesting plot. What really threw me was Abby, her character was flat and one dimensional. The good part is that there was no telling and an interesting plot idea. I’ll keep Ms. Milton on my list to read again in the future to see if she polishes her writing skills.
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