Futuristic - novel
TBR Reviewer: B.H.
TBR Reviewer: B.H.
Review
My first issue: the editing is so bad. The comma use, run-ons and head hops are so freaking bad I wanted to scream. This plot sounded unique but the damn editing kept ruining the story. There are long paragraphs without breaks, the flow is atrocious and some scenes make no sense without information on this futuristic world. Why would the ups guy need to ask Donavan if he’s a terrorist on behalf of President Jesus? There’s no back story, no explanations or details into this world.
The world building was minimal. The author explained without showing it. He never painted the picture of this futuristic world so we could get a good view. There’s also sections where Donovan has flash backs but it’s all telling and so hard to read. The mistakes are awful and
turned a interesting book into something I don’t know if I’ll finish. Then the author actually tells us the robot manual. You’re kidding right? I don’t even like reading manuals in real life, why would I want to read it in a fiction book?
In the end, the flash backs ruined any chance this story had. They needed to be trimmed or deleted. The plot was unique but the execution fell flat.
The world building was minimal. The author explained without showing it. He never painted the picture of this futuristic world so we could get a good view. There’s also sections where Donovan has flash backs but it’s all telling and so hard to read. The mistakes are awful and
turned a interesting book into something I don’t know if I’ll finish. Then the author actually tells us the robot manual. You’re kidding right? I don’t even like reading manuals in real life, why would I want to read it in a fiction book?
In the end, the flash backs ruined any chance this story had. They needed to be trimmed or deleted. The plot was unique but the execution fell flat.
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